Today I finished my persuasive writing, I improved it by adding more paragraphs to separate the different stages.
Why sports is better than TV, sports is better than TV because you get to get fit, healthy and live a long life, you get exercise that will help you in your life you will get fit and athletic and you will be able to run, do things you wouldn’t think you would’ve been able to do. You get strong, fit, and healthy, so you can live a good long life. TV is bad for your eyes, and also has links towards anxiety and depression.
Sports are really good for mental health and lead you to success through life. TV is bad because it can also lead towards obesity, sleep problems and chronic neck and back problems. If adults do more sports then they can lead by example for the young, they will be able to get fit and healthy so they will have a great time too, if they find their desired sports.
Sports is way better, at least your fit, and having a good time outside of the house, we want to make these percentages of how many people participate in sports, and also decrease the percentage of obesity.